Chronicles of a broken heart March 21, 2006
Posted by Alex or Clifton (circle one) in Alex, Alex’s Love Poems.trackback
You gracefully walk down the hall I call your name, but you seem not to hear
I look at you
But you turn away, as if I was some kind of monster that hid underneath the bed
That’s me, always being turned away by
The people I like
And you always ignore me, except
For the occasional “Hi” or “Finky”
Ignore me, condemn me, and Pay me no mind
If you so desire
All of them make me feel worse
Like I never should’ve said anything
It could’ve worked,
You and I together
But you stepped on my heart
Now just a mass of blood pumping flesh
That lost it’s function; Like it has no other
Purpose, except for just keeping me alive.
Well you can have it your way
Just leave me be
But don’t ever
Ever
Forget about me.
This is incredible! I love the description and it flowed really well (is flowed a word?)!
But you stepped on my heart
Now just a mass of blood pumping flesh
That lost it’s function; Like it has no other
Purpose, except for just keeping me alive.
I love these four lines because you show that a heart has more of a purpose than just keeping you alive. Also, when you say that it’s lost it’s function what comes to mind is the ability for it to keep you alive but you’re talking about love and I found that…striking? Keep writing this is AMAZING!
Alex,
It was wonderful to meet you last week. You are a truly gifted writer. Your words are wonderfully descriptive deeply heartfelt, and completely real. You write from your very core which is why it connects so much with your reader.
Keep writing–I know that one day I will be standing in line for YOUR autograph.
It was an honor to read your work.
Denise Vega
Author, CLICK HERE (To Find Out How I Survived Seventh Grade)